A moment with my youngest son
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"Is this the last game of the year," ask my seven year old.
I answered, "Oh no. We go on to play for the state championship - it's more important!"
"Has Allegany ever won a championship," He asked inquisitively.
I stammered, "Ugh, well yes a few."
"Who has won the most? Allegany or Fort Hill," He asked with widening eyes.
"Ugh... well... that is not as... I'll explain when you're older. Oh, we gotta go." I said hastening him to the car.
There. Fixed it.
Originally posted by Lagmeister:
"Is this the last game of the year," ask my seven year old.
I answered, "Oh no. We go on to play for the state championship - it's more important!"
"Has Allegany ever won a championship," He asked inquisitively.
I stammered, "Ugh, well yes a few."
"Who has won the most? Allegany or Fort Hill," He asked with widening eyes.
"Ugh... well... that is not as... I'll explain when you're older. Oh, we gotta go." I said hastening him to the car.
There. Fixed it.
What?
Dont want to talk about history or the past said the boy, but I do want to hear just how great and well known they are all over the state. How do you have so many Championships in the future? That is the sound of a sore loser someone unable to win so many championships said the boy. Then the boy said the school that wears blue with all the Championships, also had winning teams in other sports too.........wow o
Dialogue with the accompanying dynamic allows the reader to live in the moment. It stirs the imagination rather than have a declarative block of words twaddle about the events.
"Is this the last game of the year," ask my seven year old.
I answered, "Oh no. We go on to play for the state championship - it's more important!"
"Has Allegany ever won a championship," He asked inquisitively.
I stammered, "Ugh, well yes a few."
"Who has won the most? Allegany or Fort Hill," He asked with widening eyes.
"Ugh... well... that is not as... I'll explain when you're older. Oh, we gotta go." I said hastening him to the car.
This post was edited on 11/12 10:29 AM by Lagmeister
Lags, as an accomplished "local watering hole hero" that specializes in "Twaddle," I have to disagree. Reading dialogue is too bulky, and it completely destroys any and all flow so neccesary to delivering a good punchline.
The original poster had it right, and his original pro-Fort Hill post had nice flow and was pure brilliance that simply couldn't be topped. Once that beauty made its way to the Message Board, the moment had passed, the bird had flown the coop. the ship had sailed. There was nothing you or the other Blue Birds could do to "one-up" this gold-standard of a comment. When you attempted to do it with bulky dialogue that lacked comedic flow, well, things went to hell in the proverbial hand basket.
I was addressing you, not the original poster. His post was funny. I added Alco spin with dialogue and compared it to your twaddling style - solely because you chimed in. And what's with "bulky?" Go get a shunt and drain some of that bulk from your script -
7 hackneyed cliches in 4 sentences:
couldn't be topped
moment had passed
the bird had flown the coop
ship had sailed
"one-up"
gold-standard
went to hell in the proverbial hand basket
"Take my wife... please!" - is dialogue.
Lags......it's a style that speaks to the masses, you know, the poor chaps that do most of the living and dying in this poor town. Gives me plenty of street cred and respect in the local speakeasies. Mine is purposely a non-sensical, rambling style of Twaddle, it just wouldn't work any other way. You sure have made quite a reversal from a guy who "love[d] [my] stuff" just a short time ago. They wouldn't recognize your kind of talk around here. I, however, have you pegged as someone who attempts to cover up a gutter snipe mentality with a fancified version of the King's English. Where I come from, we have a title for guys like you----Lord Muck from Sh*t Hill.
This post was edited on 11/12 7:19 PM by PolkHighPride
This post was edited on 11/12 7:25 PM by PolkHighPride
This post was edited on 11/12 7:19 PM by PolkHighPride
This post was edited on 11/12 7:25 PM by PolkHighPride
I can own the gutter snipe bit - been sort of called that before. I was on the poor fringes of the Allegany system and never got on - as it were - with the Dingle folks. My college education was at Frostburg, so there is nothing elitist about my education - which, incidentally, I paid for myself.
Having grown up in Cumberland in the 50's, high school in the 60's, then college in the 70's, I have a perspective on Cumberland that matches most forum members. Admittedly, I am missing the current crime wave.
For the record, you started the hostility. I can give you a gratuitous plug on a post now and then.... but if you want to come after me, I will give you a stark and frank review of your posts.
I have no desire to continue this "tit for tat" hostility. Honestly, I fancy you a stand-up guy, but it's clear you don't cotton to those who don't march lock-step with your views. As for your frank reviews of my posts, I'm not interested. All the greats have their detractors. In 1932, Albert Einstein quipped that "there is no indication that nuclear energy will ever be obtainable." In 1955, Variety Magazine declared that Rock N Roll would be "gone by June." In 1962, Decca Records declined to sign the Rolling Stones because they "didn't like their sound" and thought that "guitar music was on the way out." By the time it's all said and done, schools will be named after Polk High.
This post was edited on 11/12 9:03 PM by PolkHighPride
This post was edited on 11/12 9:03 PM by PolkHighPride
Quite frankly, I see the situation as quite opposite. You are not the 'voice crying in the wilderness' - I am. This forum gives the idea of 'painting the town red' a new meaning. Some of you folks are "lock-step" in jackboots. That's fine, they're kind of girlie jackboots.
I usually stand alone in accordance with the following:
When true genius appears in the world,
you may know him by this sign, that the dunces
are all in confederacy against him. - Jonathan Swift
Did you ever take a look to see who is left around?
Everyone I thought was cool, is six feet under ground. - Rick Derringer
I'm too sexy for this forum
too sexy others bore 'em
I'm too sexy
I'm too sexy to like Korn
too sexy watch 'm shorn
I'm too sexy
I'm too sexy for this game
too sexy to find blame
I'm too sexy - apologies to Right Said Fred
And then the little boy said to his dad that blue team sounds pretty good I would like the watch them play....Who do they play next week????
And then the little boy said to his dad if FortHill wins the State Championship again this year they will still be 4 State Championships behind Allegany? and the dad said I'm afraid your right son, and then the little boy said to his dad will FortHill ever catch Allegany in State Championships and the dad said not in your life time son, not in your life time.
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